My query letter, advice is welcome :)?

shearas519 asked:


Dear;

I am seeking representation for my fantasy adventure novel, Scorched, complete at 100,000 words. My novel ends with a hint of a sequel, as my goal is to continue on with the characters.

Scorched follows the life of Cisilt, a boy who may want to protect his family a little bit to much, his sister Ana, and Brock, a boy sent to Nitrical from Earth with a few devastating secrets. The three of them soon must face challenges that none are prepared for to save the ones they love and their world, and to stop Scorch from ruining their lives forever. They are all equally un-prepared for what they soon learn about each other and themselves.

The market for his book will be adolescent or young adult, also readers of science fiction and adventure. The book ends with Scorch running away through the portal to earth, thus, Nitrical being saved.

I have been writing for several online and published magazines, in many different topics from poetry to scripts.

A #10 S.A.S.E letter envelope and large S.A.S.E to return manuscript is enclosed.

Thank you for reading my query, and a manuscript or sample chapter(s) are available upon request.

Sincerely,

*my name here*

Obviously I know, yahoo answers people that the title ‘scorched’ is to be in italics,
so any thoughts are more than appreciated.